just a child inside a mirror,
burning fires inside of hell,
lost moments to remember,
is it you that is looking,
ripples in the pond
from a stone, who can tell?
an infants cry so distant,
all emotions cast aside,
echoes of the snow capped mountains,
the bird flies free,
against the wind swept water,
there is nowhere to hide.
17 comments:
Love it fantastic poenm
So happy you decided to join One Shot, babe. Love your poems xxxx
that last line rings rather ominous against the first...a child trapped in a mirror and no where to hide...nice one shot!
Great one shot Whitesnake...look forward to reading more of your writing! :-)
Perfect title for the various perspectives and imagery in your poem. Nice one shot!
Yes you do...it better that is. Love this poem.
b
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I could be reading this wrong, but it seems like the lament of lost youth...and not necessarily a good one. I love the imagery - so strong!
the child inside the mirror -- we all see that, I think. You described it exactly.
I love poetry that can address many issues. Looking back at childhood in a lament, a child whose memories were bleak, a child who is caught in a nightmare.
Nicely done and glad you shared with One Shot - welcome
Moon Smiles
Fantastic writing here brother...
You should make it a double Shot this week and do a Friday Flash 55!
It's a lot easier than poetry.
Unless of course you do a poem!
I would like to thank you all for you comments I will try to get around to all of you as so as I get some time...
Nice work, whitesnake!
Many reflections-I saw the various reflections over a lifetime that helped define that life. Beautiful imagery. Thanks. Gay (beachanny)
i felt the first and last lines seep into my marrow
very strong ty
How great... astounding choice of word for an apparantely scenaario...
;)
D.
your opening line was such a crowd puller, i think so many of us can see that...it still amazes me that when i think and speak i still hear the voice of a child...thanks for sharing...pete
the ripples of time ... wonderful expression of thought & emotion!
I have a new blog address: www.janepoet.com ... hope to see you there, Steve!
cheers,
JP/deborah
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