Wednesday, October 27, 2010

Taking Control



Her thoughts were her own
On the hospital bed,
Echoing words,
The things that he said

Control and cage you,
Break your soul to the core,
Say that he loves you,
Call you a slut and whore.

Her husband beside her,
Took his eyes from his book,
“Tidy your face girl.”
“You make me feel crook.”

It was then the door opened,
There stood a man,
He moved straight towards her,
Held out his hand.

The husband got angry,
Picked up his chair,
He threw it towards him,
But the man wasn’t there.

Her husbands last memory,
Was the pain in his head,
Pain of ribs broken,
He’d wished he was dead.

Returned to the room,
She had tears in her eyes,
He asked her no questions,
What ifs and no why’s.

He just held her hand,
As it shook and it shake,
He kissed it so gently,
No pain did it make.

For the rest of her time there,
He sat by her bed,
Telling her stories,
Of things they had said.

She swore then and there,
That never again,
Would a man have control,
Or drive her insane.

Whitesnakes do it better ......... When a man loves a woman.







17 comments:

KB said...

Brings back memories. Excellent writing darlin'
xxxx

Steve Isaak said...

Good use of structure, word-pictures. Solid.

Brian Miller said...

nice. sounds like the real man showed up, and she learned a valuable lesson...smiles. nice one shot!

Desert Rose said...

Great flow here , tight write white snakes..:)

Kodjo Deynoo said...

Yea good write One Shot

Anonymous said...

Hating the fact that I've been here, but made a break for it! Great write!

moondustwriter said...

truly that man loved that woman...

nice One Shot

moon
smiles

Hope said...

my goodness...I felt it in my gut!
very good, clear writing
thank you
Hope.

http://theworksofhope.blogspot.com/

Anonymous said...

I remember love like this. Nice One Shot. Love and Light, Sender

Ben Langhinrichs said...

Interesting story and structure. Love is better when it cherishes rather than takes for granted.

Shashidhar Sharma said...

Never again... that is so powerfully said.. I enjoyed reading it.. Thanks

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PattiKen said...

Excellent, Whitesnake, especially for Halloween week. I enjoyed it a lot.

Anonymous said...

Very well done...defining the moments "never again" ....great writing.

Anonymous said...

This grabbed me by the throat and wouldn't let go. I liked this.

Mona said...

Ah! there is someone watching over her! Great! :)

Hope said...

thanks for the visit to my blog and for your comment.

see you again!
Hope

Marshy said...

very well put...a great share for one shot..cheers pete

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