On the hospital bed,
Echoing words,
The things that he said
Control and cage you,
Break your soul to the core,
Say that he loves you,
Call you a slut and whore.
Her husband beside her,
Took his eyes from his book,
“Tidy your face girl.”
“You make me feel crook.”
It was then the door opened,
There stood a man,
He moved straight towards her,
Held out his hand.
The husband got angry,
Picked up his chair,
He threw it towards him,
But the man wasn’t there.
Her husbands last memory,
Was the pain in his head,
Pain of ribs broken,
He’d wished he was dead.
Returned to the room,
She had tears in her eyes,
He asked her no questions,
What ifs and no why’s.
He just held her hand,
As it shook and it shake,
He kissed it so gently,
No pain did it make.
For the rest of her time there,
He sat by her bed,
Telling her stories,
Of things they had said.
She swore then and there,
That never again,
Would a man have control,
Or drive her insane.
Whitesnakes do it better ......... When a man loves a woman.
17 comments:
Brings back memories. Excellent writing darlin'
xxxx
Good use of structure, word-pictures. Solid.
nice. sounds like the real man showed up, and she learned a valuable lesson...smiles. nice one shot!
Great flow here , tight write white snakes..:)
Yea good write One Shot
Hating the fact that I've been here, but made a break for it! Great write!
truly that man loved that woman...
nice One Shot
moon
smiles
my goodness...I felt it in my gut!
very good, clear writing
thank you
Hope.
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I remember love like this. Nice One Shot. Love and Light, Sender
Interesting story and structure. Love is better when it cherishes rather than takes for granted.
Never again... that is so powerfully said.. I enjoyed reading it.. Thanks
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Excellent, Whitesnake, especially for Halloween week. I enjoyed it a lot.
Very well done...defining the moments "never again" ....great writing.
This grabbed me by the throat and wouldn't let go. I liked this.
Ah! there is someone watching over her! Great! :)
thanks for the visit to my blog and for your comment.
see you again!
Hope
very well put...a great share for one shot..cheers pete
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